在英語學(xué)習(xí)中，閱讀語法書往往不如閱讀高水平的語法總結(jié)。至少，總結(jié)凝聚了作者個人的理解與原創(chuàng)思考。然而，純粹的語法總結(jié)又遠(yuǎn)不如英語學(xué)習(xí)者所寫的原創(chuàng)糾錯內(nèi)容有價值。因為學(xué)習(xí)者在寫作中流露的，是一種自然狀態(tài)下的語言組織過程，其所呈現(xiàn)的理解方式—甚至是誤區(qū)—正是教師希望觀察到的。只有基于這樣的真實輸出，才能開展有針對性的分析，從而實現(xiàn)“量體裁衣”式的輔導(dǎo)。此外，排版也不容忽視。清晰的版式令人悅讀，促進(jìn)理解；而混亂的排版則容易讓人望而生厭，失去細(xì)讀的耐心。

今天我所讀到的這篇文章，作者態(tài)度認(rèn)真，表達(dá)自然流暢，能夠清晰地看出其組織思路與遣詞邏輯。因此，我認(rèn)為這篇文章非常值得深入探討。文中除了出現(xiàn)“現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語與邏輯主語不一致”的問題之外，還存在一些其它表達(dá)上的瑕疵。先看看原文吧，請不要看我的答案，大家盡量挖掘其中的問題。后面有思考題[煙花]

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一，發(fā)現(xiàn)問題

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二，分析問題并修改

（一）描述過去的事要用一般過去時態(tài)。文章所有的is，應(yīng)該用was

1.The atmosphere was grand...

2.It was very formal.

3.The phenomenon was that ...

（二）現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語，必須邏輯主語一致（除獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)和特殊短語之外）

1.Coming back, Tom was very happy to see his son at home. 湯姆回來的時候，看見他兒子在家了非常高興。

現(xiàn)在分詞coming的邏輯主語是Tom

2.My brother hurried to school, running all the way.我弟弟急急忙忙趕到學(xué)校的，一路上跑著。

現(xiàn)在分詞running的邏輯主語是My brother

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3.Standing there, the little girl wrote Chinese calligraphy.那個女孩站著寫中國書法。

現(xiàn)在分詞standing的邏輯主語是the little girl。

4.Being the bridegroom's aunt, both my sister and me were invited onto the stage to express each one's good wishes to the new couple.這句有嚴(yán)重的問題。

首先，要用主格代詞I，不能用賓格代詞。既然是新郎的姨媽，being the bridegroom's aunt，就是一個人，所以后面的主語應(yīng)該是一個人。把together with my sister做狀語，用逗號隔開。應(yīng)該這樣修改

Being the bridegroom's aunt, I, together with my sister, was invited onto the stage to express each one's good wishes to the new couple.[煙花]現(xiàn)在分詞being的邏輯主語是I

作為新郎的姨媽，我和妹妹一起受邀登臺向這對新婚夫婦表達(dá)各自的祝福。

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（三）任何句子都要有謂語動詞，除了省略句之外。

Too many dishes. 不是句子。根據(jù)語境判斷，應(yīng)該用動詞serve的被動語態(tài)。

Too many dishes were served.[煙花]

（四）最后應(yīng)該用被動語態(tài)

Not too much waste was incurred.

但是，這樣修改雖然語法正確，但是不地道。用there be句型更好。

There was not too much waste.[煙花]

浪費的不太多。

我最后的修改版本如下

The wedding was held in a professional wedding venue in a traditional way. The ceremony lasted long. The atmosphere was grand and impressive. Both bride and bridegroom wore traditional wedding costumes. It was very formal. Being the bridegroom's aunt, I, together with my sister , was invited onto the stage to express each one's good wishes to the new couple.The feast was really great and abundant. Too many dishes were served. Almost 1/ 3 of food was left untouched. A good phenomenon was that most of the left untouched dishes were packed and taken away. So there wasn't too much waste.

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三，總結(jié)

下面是DeepSeek對我的評價

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思考題[煙花]改錯

1.My brother put his bag on the bike and rides to school.

2.The little girl stood at the gate of the office, waited for the teacher to come.

3.The old man sat in the room, watched TV.

4.Walking in the street, the flowers are beautiful.

5.Work hard, you will succeed.